Oh my word!

Last month, a new writer emailed to thank me for a blog post that I had written back in 2010. Well! I had to go back in time and revisit this post for myself.  I realized that the information is worth sharing again.

The topic? Word Choice

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When writing picture books, I strive to tell as much as possible in as little as possible. This helps me to leave plenty of room for the illustrator to do half the storytelling through the art.

One of my key jobs is to use great words. Each word must count. Each word should be the best possible choice.

I usually start with the name of my main character. With my book Mostly Monsterly, illustrated by Scott Magoon (Paula Wiseman/Simon & Schuster, 2010), for example, my main character is a monster. I didn’t want to give her just any name. Kate wasn’t right. Neither was Hailey.

But Bernadette? Now, that was a name for a monster.

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Once I had my main character’s name, I did some brainstorming. I jotted down words that had a monsterly feel and would help set the tone for my story.

fangs • fur • tail • monster • gross • claws • toothy • huff • ew • spit • mumble • grumble • yuck • eyeballs • toenails • drool • growl • lurch • creepy • snot • teeth • horns • stomp • slobber • mayhem • scary • hairy

Later, as I worked on the text, I drew from this list. Many of these words can be found on the first two-page spread of Mostly Monsterly.

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Not all of the words from my list, however, made it into the story. If a word didn’t add to the character development or storyline in some way, that word was not included. Also, since my picture books are humorous, I like to choose words that sound funny. This helps to create a more satisfying read aloud experience. In Mostly Monsterly, for instance, the words “fangs” and “slobber” made their way into the text. “Teeth” and “spit” did not.

Another thing I try to do is use specific words that show the reader something about the characters. My monsters never “walked.” They “lurched.” And when Bernadette was sad, I didn’t simply tell the reader, “Bernadette was sad.” I showed that sadness in this line: “Bernadette’s tail drooped.”

These are just a few of the things I do when it comes to selecting the right words. I want my picture books to sing! Or, in the case of Mostly Monsterly, grumble and growl.

Tammi Sauer

Tammi Sauer

Tammi Sauer is a former teacher and library media specialist. She has sold 28 picture books to major publishing houses. In addition to winning awards, her books have gone on to do great things. Mostly Monsterly was selected for the 2012 Cheerios Spoonfuls of Stories program. Me Want Pet! was recently released in French which makes her feel extra fancy. And Nugget and Fang, along with Tammi herself, appeared on the Spring 2015 Scholastic Book Fair DVD which was seen by millions kids across the nation. Her latest books include I LOVE CAKE! and Ginny Louise and the School Field Day.

16 Comments:

  1. Thank you for this mini lesson, Tammi Sauer! Explains why your books are so marvelously magical!

  2. Ha! I thought this was written by Matthew Winner, with the catch phrase, “Oh, my word!” Great post, Tammi. Your PBs make wonderful mentor texts for word choice (and pacing and character development and…).

  3. SO true! And brainstorming is one of the best exercises I’ve found for writing picture books–great for generating fantastic words, like lurch and slobber!

  4. Great post, Tammi! I love the idea of brainstorming words before even starting to write. Thanks for the inspiration!

  5. Thank you, Tammi! This lesson-ette is just what I need right now as I dive into a new manuscript. Brainstorming really goes a long way!

  6. Me, too–two new PBs in progress, so that’s a great place to start!

    Thanks, Tammi!

  7. Thanks for showing your processing of word choice, Tammi!

  8. Tammi, I have Nugget and Fang in my office right now. Grandson loves it. Word choice to create just the “write” character is so crucial. I make word lists, too, but i need to punch them up w/funnier choices. Very helpful post. (BTW, former 7th grade teacher and school librarian, too.)

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