A Little Poetry in your Prose

If you’re familiar with my books, you know I love rhyme. I love writing in rhyme, and I love reading rhyme (good rhyme—no one likes reading the clunky stuff). I love the music, the rhythm, the sound of it. Well-written verse is just plain fun to read aloud.

But not everyone wants to write in rhyme, and—truth be told—we rarely hear editors clamoring for more of it (they get too much of that clunky stuff). Still, incorporating poetic elements into your prose can strengthen your story and enhance its “read-aloudability”—something you’ll appreciate when you’re facing down that squiggly group of preschoolers during story time.

So how do you add poetry to your prose? For that, we turn to Candace Fleming’s Tippy-Tippy-Tippy, Splash! (Atheneum, 2014), the third installment in her Mr. McGreely versus the bunnies saga.


Here, as in the first two books—Muncha! Muncha! Muncha! (2002) and Tippy-Tippy-Tippy, Hide! (2007)—Mr. McGreely wants some peace and quiet, but three persistent bunnies keep spoiling his plans. In this latest episode, he escapes to the beach for a day—free at last!—then discovers those sneaky bunnies have tagged along.

The man vs. bunny conflict offers an excellent framework for escalating drama and humor. But this is more than a great story. Thanks to the language, it’s also a joy-to-read-aloud story. Here’s a quick sampling of some poetic elements.

Rhyme and Rhythm
Although written in prose, the book includes some rhyming phrases throughout. While it can be tricky mixing rhyme and prose, it works beautifully here. For example, here’s how the book begins:

“Mr. McGreely had bunny problems.
He had bunnies in his garden.
Bunnies in his shed.
Bunnies in his cupboard.
Bunnies in his . . . BED!”

In addition to the rhyme, did you notice all the “bunnies” in that introduction? Nice, right? You might also have noticed the repetition of “muncha” and “tippy” in the titles. In fact, those “tippy”s—representing the pitter-patter of little bunny feet—are used as a refrain throughout the three books.

So, for example, just before Mr. McGreely heads to the beach, the bunnies sneak into the car and strap themselves in:

“Tippy-tippy-tippy, pat!

 Then they show up beside him on his beach blanket:

“Tippy-tippy-tippy, pat!

So we’ve got the repetition of sounds and phrases, with a little onomatopoeia thrown in for good measure. What else? Read on.

Alliteration and Assonance
If you look at those refrains again, you’ll notice the use of both alliteration (flip/flop and click/clack) and assonance (clack/snap and plop/flop).

Here’s another great line that combines rhyme and the repetition of sounds:

“So together they shoveled and shaped, scooped and caked,
molded and piled and patted and raked.”

Clever Language
Later in the story, Mr. McGreely attempts to surf. As with most of his efforts, he’s not very successful (as indicated by some evocative sound effects: “CRASH SMASH GLUB GLUB BLUB”). The bunnies, on the other hand, are quite adept at surfing. Again, pay attention to the rhyme, rhythm and playful sounds in the spread below. G. Brian Karas’s illustrations add to the charm:

tippy cowabunnies

Click to enlarge. Copyright 2014 G. Brian Karas.

One more thought about clever language. Say you’re writing a story about troublesome rabbits. You could just keep it simple and refer to them as rabbits, or you could come up with terms that are fun to say and pleasing to the ear. In the spread below, Mr. McGreely calls them “wily twitchwhiskers”:


Click to enlarge. Copyright 2014 G. Brian Karas.


But he’s got other names for them as well: Infuriating flop-ears. Pesky pufftails. Naughty wigglenoses. Four-pawed show-offs. 

To really appreciate the poetry of these books—and the funny stories they tell—you’ll have to read them. Preferably aloud.

I suspect that most writers don’t consciously set out to incorporate poetry into their prose, and I’m not suggesting  you scan your manuscript looking for places to work in a few lines of rhyme or a touch of alliteration. But paying attention to the rhythm, language, and sounds in your text can make all the difference between a pretty good story and a musical one. So read your manuscripts aloud—or have someone read them to you—and keep polishing until the language sings.

Are there books you find especially musical or fun to read aloud? I’d love to hear.

Thanks for reading, and Happy Thanksgiving to all!

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Linda Ashman

Linda Ashman is the author of more than 45 picture books, as well as The Nuts and Bolts Guide to Writing Picture Books, a how-to guide for picture book writers. Her books have been included on the ‘best of the year’ lists of The New York Times, Kirkus Reviews, the American Library Association, the Children’s Book Council, and The New York Public Library, among others, and have been translated into many languages.


  1. Linda,
    I can learn a lot from this post. Thanks so much for sharing tips to help other writers!

  2. Cowa-bunnies! What a terrific and informative post, Linda, thank you!

  3. And thank YOU and your family for all the technical assistance. UGH!

  4. What a wonderful, fun and informative post! Thank you!

  5. Love this post and must go find these Tippy Tippy books!!

    I drew a post once about writing in rhyme once…
    http://www.kevanatteberry.com/#!Don't Write a Book in Rhyme/c1x4f

  6. I’ll definitely check out those books! Love the way the rhyme works so seamlessly with the rest of the text.

  7. I’ll never forget the reaction I had from the kids when reading Muncha Muncha Muncha to a group of kindergarteners. I’m so glad to learn there is a new book in the series. We can learn a lot about using poetic language and techniques from these stories, for sure!

  8. Great post, Linda! Thank you.

  9. Thank you, Linda! What a great post and an invitation to get these books! I learn from every picture book I read, and this one looks like a keeper!

  10. Great post, Linda! Great read-alouds so often contain poetic elements.

  11. Candace’s books are always chock-full of beautifully-crafted language!

  12. This is a great study post. Thanks!

  13. Terrific post. I love this language, I want to eat it up and speak it out.

  14. What fun language. Thanks for all the wonderful tips! I must “tippy-tippy-tippy, dash” out to get this book!

  15. Thanks for this wonderful post. I ordered up the book and printed out this post to keep handy. Very useful stuff.

  16. Great post! Thanks for the examples!

  17. Loved this post – so very helpful as I am working on a rhyming text right now. Sometimes it flows so easily, sometimes it comes so hard – and other times, changing one word or stress throws while pages out of whack. Thanks for all the detailed tips with examples!

  18. Wonderful post, Linda! Thank you for singing the praises of poetic prose. 🙂

  19. I love this post, Linda, and your praise of Candace Fleming’s poetic style. I “discovered” the McGreeley vs. bunnies books about a month ago and immediately fell in love with them. The language is so fun and entertaining. Not one wasted word on the page. Even the silly sound effects, like “Tippy-tippy-tippy, pat! Click-clack-snap!” and “CRASH SMASH GLUB GLUB BLUB,” incorporate colorful verbs that move the story forward.

  20. Wonderful post, thank you. I especially love those bunny names!

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